My Uncle's Tangi

On the weekend I went to a tangi because my uncle died. When we first come on I felt sad and my mum also felt sad too. I went to go and play with my cousins.Then after that we had to sing a song for my uncle. When the song was over we went to have a cup of tea  with my cousins,uncles and aunties.When we finished our cup of tea we had to go to the wharekai. I didn't feel good until I had to go and see my uncle,then I felt better. But when I went to play I said no, because I was tired. When I woke up it was dark, and it was dinner.After dinner I went to see my uncle Boy,and went to sleep by him.In the morning we all got up to bury our uncle.After the service and cleanup my mum and I travelled back to Hastings.

Summarising

lost at the maze

                       LOST AT THE MAZE

Yay this is exciting I thought to myself.

This is my first time at the maze I was there with my uncle and auntie  until I got lost. I was sprinting toward the gold gate and then I saw this strong man. He said kindly come with me little boy and I did. I  was confused. He took me to my family and we drove to dinner. We went back to the maze and we played hide and seek. I had to be in . When I had to be in I felt scared because something furry was slowly moving around me. It was my dog. I said bad boy. After that me and my dog found everyone.

My goal was to put in better words and commas. I think I did put in better words. I need to work on my commas.
    

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